Well its good like it is but it would be better with a different ending, but it is still a 5/5!!!

I think that this is a wonderful poem. Please add on to it.5/5

Brilliant!
To me it looks like each verse is a stage in the girls life (I may be wrong but..) if I am right, carry on each verse as a section of this girls life.

To say the truth i thought that this was a great start i give it a 5/5

You should add onto it cuhs` it sounds unfinished . It is fair -- Not great, but it`s not bad either . It transitions from the father to the mother quite quickly tho . Keep working on it .
..__MiNDYY

I think it is a good start...just keep on working on it/ also remember it is your poem no one elses, so you have to make your own judgment on it.....5/5