Comments : Friend, Knife, Enemy

  • 17 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    You asked for comments, but from the tone of this I will be gentle.

    1) You don't specify any reasons for the friendship's end, either perceived or actual, from either person's perspective.

    2) This seems to be another meandering "self harm" poem so popular with youngsters today. And while it is interesting to see this perverse Victorian practivce making an unhealthy comeback I have yet so see a single person write of gaining a positive from it. I think we both know why.

    I'm sure this is a clear-cut (sic) 5/5 if you're a depressed middle class 15-year old. But I've been reading stuff like this for longer than you've been alive and while this is probably great therapy for whatever troubles you, it is pedestrian and uninspiring to some.

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    I can relate to this one here in many ways. And I have had a lot of friends turned enemies due to this problem in my life. You had a good flow, great choice of words, and I can tell that you put a lot of emotions into this one. You've got talent, keep writing! 5/5

    Stephanie

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very good poem. I think that you got the length of it just right. I also think that you had great word choice.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by kiara

    I know what your saying by friends turn into enemies
    me and my best friend are now enemies
    i luv this one