Train station of life

Hi, I saw some posts of yours in the forum and decided to check out your poems. I'm glad I did. This one is deep, and I really like it. It put me in the actual ride, and really made me think. The only criticism I have for you is the ending - you are a great writer and I think the ending line here could be stronger/more powerful. I love the poem! ~Tara

So true! great work. actually, i had state testing like a day before i wrote tick, tock and i sat by the clock and it made this noise after every minute. i was also really bored. but i also wrote it because sometimes, you really have to realize, you don't have all the time in the world. i don't actually know because i wrote it at like midnoght! lol. but great job on your poem!

It described the reality, and it very descriptive about it..its a good piece and well penned

keep it up!