Not sure what it's missing it doesn't seem to flow good.

I agree with melissa, something missing, it didnt flow 2 well.... it was interesting tho and i could realte to it so 4/5

Agen u jus need more imagery and somehow u need to attract the reader into the story more. but its a good poem. never give up

Hi again, well what this poem needs, like said earlier, some flow, some words that rimes 0-a-0-a perhaps, thats a good structure. I know that it is a love poem, but perhaps you could have some BAD moments, that turns into positive situations again, this makes it different than all the cliché love poems all knows about.
Mark

I liked it except it could have had a little more emotion. but keep up ur work, its good

This is great but cloud 9 doesnt last forever

Aww wow i really like this poem a lot. it's so wonderful. you did a great job writing this. keep it up 5/5

~Kristina

It does need improvement although the descripitons were bettter than the other poem. Work on the descriptions and flow. 4/5

I think that the phrase cloud nine is a bit over used.and some phrases are a bit repetitive perhaps. But the sentiments are good.

Its goodd. but there is something not there. its a good try tho. 4/5.

Mmm, i dunno. don't want to be harsh (but i speak my mind", i didn't like it much, it wasn't terrible, but it didnt seem to catch my eye, therefore seemed not to flow well, but it was a good try, and we should all be grateful for that.
well done

Nice, sweet. pretty good. i like it. i think it'd be cute to give to him. lol

I have given you everything,- i think this line should be I have given you my everything, -idk im odd,.

and ithink you should have a break after the last line... cause i started reading your message like it was part of the poem.. lol

Also- commas at the end of each line is not correct punctuation. Please try to use correct punctuation. maybe periods, some commas, semi and regular colons?

x3 Lauren

1st stanza, last line to night should be tonight
2nd stanza, last line the flow is off silightley try removing a word or two
other that that the simple word choice was effective here, the emtion was strong, and the
was suprisingly great. another wel done job 5/5