Lightning

Awwwesome rhyme keep it up

This is soo descriptive! Great imagery and very amazing! I love it!
xoxo

I like this. it's very invintive.

Hey. I'm sure I've told you already that I do appreciate love poems above all else. However, I really liked reading this. My favourite thing about nature poems are the amount of description you can put into it. A nature poem that's not yet written, is like the brandnew canvas not yet used. And when they're done, you can admire it for a while, observing ever detail.
That is what I liked about your poem. I love lightening (it's the thunder that scares me hehe) and your poem was short enough not to drag on and long enough to describe so much. I really saw what you were capable of here :).
I also really enjoyed your stanzas and how they rhymed with the same sounds throughout. This is hard to do and keep your reader entranced the way you did, so for that I want to give you plenty of praise! Wonderful!
The one thing that I would change though, if it were my own poem, would be in this line:

Quickly the lightning flies,
''So very way up high''

It seemed you put the 'very way up' just so that you could force another syllable to keep your rhythm flowing. Lots of writers have to do this sometimes, (and I am one of them that does) but there are other alternatives than just adding another word. If you take a step back, and consider re-wording everything about your present idea, sometimes a different solution comes to mind. It takes alot of changin' to some ideas, but sometimes it works... (However, don't give up a line you like just because a nit picking critique like me comes along. I still think this is a wonderful poem, and I will simply be proud to have commentedon your poem whether you like my idea or not.)
Saying that, I would probably change it to something like this:

Quickly the lightning flies,
Flies up so very high.

Or if I was to really put something new to it:

Quickly the lightning flies,
Soaring with no wings aligned.

But for that one to work I'd probably nitpick at it aswell because it's not as great a flow and rhythm as the original held...Hmm, well there's plenty of ideas you could take on really, and there's also the idea to keep it as is :) . Either way this is a really nice write and I'm glad I got to see it. Thankyou.

Oooh, that's real pretty. loved it. yeahhh