I love the way when you say i forgive yout and tell us for what you forgive and i think you show how its hurt, nice work

"Your all alone,"
Should be 'You're all alone'. (You are).

"Yes i cry my self to"
'myself'

"all alone in a empty house,"
'an empty'

"a dying child, I'm dieing slowly"
'dieing' should be 'dying'

Ok, so there's a few problems with this poem. First, the grammar. The things I suggest should be editted to have this poem makes sense.

Second, the flow. It was extremely choppy.
Your sentences started, and half way through it, you sent it to the next line. That ruins the flow of the poem. Your next line should end when there is a pause needed, not in the middle of the sentence.

example:
"I got your letter, so
you say you are sorry for how
your mistakes, ruined
my life.
You say i ought to be ashamed
of you, but the funny thing is
I'M NOT."

I got your letter,
so you say you are sorry
for how your mistakes,
ruined my life.
You say i ought to be ashamed of you,
but the funny thing is
I'M NOT.

It reads alot better when the pauses come at the right moment.

It was a good poem overall. You expressed your emotions well and you shared stories to help others understand how you felt. We could feel the hurt you are hurting, but also the love you feel towards your father. It may not be a true story, but you make us feel the emotions of the person you are writing about. So it's a good poem, just needs to be fixed a little.

...so emotional. and so much imagery.

I liked this, as macabre and depressing as the subject matter is. Great job on this. My favorite stanza was:

I forgive you, for
the time that you left
me stranded on my
mamma's front porch
freezing cold.

I'm not sure why; I suppose it's just the mental-picture of a little girl standing on a porch shivering, waiting for her Daddy to come home.

Wonderful job :). Keep it up.

Hmm that was very heart feeling that really touches my heart.. the message was totally potrayed very well and it was so true.. i love how u express ur feelings in here and im sure it feels better that u express all this thoughts in ur heart.. it filled w/ deep emotions.. keep it up 5/5

Everything in this piece was so. .amazingly written and the emotions you let off were beautifully done. This was so sad, but very nicely written. Everything was just. .perfect. 5/5.

Sad, very sad :( but such a good poems. it grabbed me in at the beginning and held me until the very end

"for the rest of god's life", good choice of words 5/5

You have a few spelling mistakes. It is a good poem. It made me feel sad. which is a good thing. You are able to captivate emotions. 5*

Very sweet, and forget about the flow etc, its sweet cause its from the heart, whats it matter how its spelt etc? it dosent, well done x P

Im so sorry.
you put so much emotion into this.
it was verry sad and you could tell you didnt make it up
its always good to just write your fealings out on paper. it dose help, good job

This piece needs to be edited slightly, However I think overall the emotions carried the piece. It was quite sad, and touching.
Nicely Written.

--Elly.

Very beautifully written...very touching...
filled with emotions...

"The tear stains you see on the
paper, come from tears from
a dying child, I'm dieing slowly
for the love of my
mother,is not enough to
keep me going."
^^ i really like the turn the last stanza brought...

"I FORGIVE YOU DADDY, JUST
TO LET YOU KNOW. NOT THAT IT MATTERS ANYMORE."
^^ these lines are so hearfelt...
very well described...