My death bed

WOW this is an amazing poem i have never thought i could really bring that much feeling into a poem Good Job.

Good, remember to keep your use of capital letters constant, eg using I instead of i.
it shows emotion well and the first line of the poem particuarly stands out for its imagination, a well thought out poem that maybe requires some thinking to understand but once you have thought about it, it has a very strong point
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