Through shadows and decaying leaves
Thee are hiding amid dead trees
And thy face stands out in the dark -
Spider webs adorning thy heart.
Thee smile with bliss, but inside
Thee have always hopelessly cried,
For thy fate was stained from the start -
Spider webs adorning thy heart.
Run into the forest my dear,
In that cursed place of woe and fear
Never return - from life apart,-
Spider webs adorning thy heart.
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A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines),
and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last
line of each stanza). Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit
to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum.
In that cursed place of woe and fear
((this has 9 syllables; take out the end and put a comma, and you'll be ok. =]))
Very nice job on your first attempt. I'll give harsh critism only because I know you're going to be great. This is a very interesting topic; I loved the idea. However, the rhyming seemed forced, but with the first time writing in a style that is to be expected. So, great job, as always.