I love you like a sister.

by Teria   Nov 28, 2006


I love you like a sister.

My frowns not always perfect.
My smile hardly seems to fit.
My tears fall way too much.
And, love breaks me at the touch.

My dreams shatter continually.
And, new years resolutions are broken annually.
My hairs always a wreck,
And, I have that hideous rash upon my neck.

My eyes are never the same color.
And, boyfriends are one after another.
My teeth always shine way too bright.
And, my nose gets glossy, almost giving off light.

My mouth is a never ending thing.
And, my attitude is rarely the same.
I give off dirty looks without even knowing.
And, I my love has a weird way of showing.

I tend to smoke too much while under stress.
Yet, you're my friend, and at that the best.
You've looked past all my disappointments..
So, I love you like a sister, that's heaven sent.

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  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Cute poem..

    this line, "And, new years resolutions are broken annually." disrupts the flow ... its about a sylabble or two too long

    the first stanza was by far the best one of them all, it seems very real and simple ...

    the last line was a dissapointment... you've done so well so far by staying away from the cliche subjects.. but that line was the poster phrase for cliche friendship poems...

    i enjoyed the poem and by changing only one line it will increase greatly in excellence

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Yet another great poem by you. I loved it. Although you repeated the word "My" way too much. Try and cut back on that, and even change it up with other words. The flow was ok and the structure was good. Keep up the good work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 17 years ago

    by emmerz

    Hey the flow on this wasnt too great, but i love poems like this and you got the point across. maybe with a lil bit of work on the flow, it could be sumthin truly special! but good job on this anyways.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mo

    Aww thats so cute that you have someone like that and the poem is so good because it brings the title in at the end which is when it is all pulled together.
    -Mo-MO

  • 17 years ago

    by Kasie

    Great poem keep up the good work

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