Intoxicated

Tomarrows sunday miht as well ahve one more LMAO ok thats funni lol lol ive never gotten drunk so idont know jsut a social drinker but yeah awesome job you really made the reader feel as thou they were drunk..great job lol lol

I love humor and funny jokes~ ^^
urs is funneyyyy~

I can't remember. I think I had a night like this once.

Very funny poem

Hey. I had to check out the funny poem, simply because humour seems to be so hard to write about in a poem, and never really gets the best ratings unfortunately. However, I'm quite happy to see that you've pleasantly surprised me. (No rhyme intended hehe). I'm not one for gettin' drunk, but even those of us who are beer-virgins (so to speak) would probably find humour in this.
Not only did I enjoy the humour, but your description of everything was really good. The character you showed in it was also well brought out, it wasn't just blabbing away. (I know I'm a poet, but I do find some poetry to be quite...well, for lack of any other word, blabby. lol.) So I'm glad to see that you put more than just words to your work. For example, if this were any other poem but a funny one, you probably would not have gotten away with this rhyme here:

Where did my best mate go?
Ah, she's over there
I'd better make my way over
Ouch! That was the chair

I don't mean to be rude, I am simply pointing this out, hopin' that maybe if you go to use a rhyme in a serious/sad/love (etc) poem that sounds as forced as this, that you will hopefully think twice... I'm sure it won't be the deal, but as the commentor I felt it was my job to bring it up.
Speaking of your rhyming, you do hold some great flow - and I've found that genuine flow is hard to find, so above all be proud of that. However, the other thing I noticed is the only thing that kept you from being first place in my contest. I am a sucker for the love poems, and I thought your write was so sweet, just really good all over; but I noticed that your rhymes are a little bit cliche sometimes. Some of the words you use are over used, by an overly large amount of people. It's like a reader can now expect the word 'tears' to rhyme with 'fears' and 'love' to rhyme with 'dove' or 'above'... I know some words are hard to rhyme with, but there are a billion words that go left unsaid sometimes - it would be nice to see a broader range of vocabulary from people you know?
I hope you don't take this personal, I am not only directing it at you, I'm simply mentioning it, in hopes you'll take some of my words into consideration.
Anyway, wonderful job on this one, I didn't think anyone would succeed at a really humerous one.

Great poem