Kind of scaring me there. beautiful twist on an old subject. one of your best

I love this poem as it makes me feel the pain while reading it, i.e. makes me get into it.

well done ur a great writer

5/5. Good poem. Loved it

Oh this is so so good. i loved it. i am envious. wish i wrote this. this will be a hit. if not the world is all mad!

i gave you a 5. its so so good. it all is descriptive and the words you used are just unique.

david

I loved this.
Something I can defintely relate to.
You did an excellent job on this.

I love this poem, quite scary as people have mentioned before me. But i still liked it, it was scary because your imagery was so good, and we could all imagine it happening. I really liked the flow of this poem, had good discription. My favourite bit was the usage of repition, really great! I also enjoyed the imagery which was brilliant. Keep up the great work! xx

Although this isn't my favorite category, this is definetly full of painful emotions. I hope this isn't based on true events in your own life. Very sad poem.

The repetition worked well in this poem and its a subject i can relate to, great job hun keep it up :]
5/5

Nice job!! i really like this poem.. the only thing thats a little confuzing is the rhyme scheme its not really clear what it is.. some stanzas rhyme and others dont

Wow u are so good at writing i thought this poem was so excellent, also i can relate 2 it,5/5

Wow that was great i could really feel what was happing thank you for comnment some of my poems 5/5
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love always linda

That feeling seems familiar.
This is a good write, not quite excellent cause IU've read things similar before.
Keep fingers typing and pen scribblin'
- Em
4.5

That feeling seems familiar.
This is a good write, not quite excellent cause IU've read things similar before.
Keep fingers typing and pen scribblin'
- Em
4.5

Wow i really like this poem. its amazing! i love the idea of it. its a great poem

This one had a strong ending , very good poem =)

Totally excellent is your expression,good job

Wow this is a really deep but yet soo powerful.. its a really good poem. and I especially really liked how you repeated the "just the sight of it" it has a good flow to it good job and keep up the good work 5/5

Such a sad poem really it made me cry and few poems can do that. i just wanted to tell you that as long as i've been on this site you are to only one that has such deep meanings to me at least. something told me that you should hear or atleast see what i wrote. great read:~)Sam

Although the beginning line for each stanza was the same, it never sounded like it was just repeating itself. You've chosen a great line to use, and you've used it so effectively for the poem! Astonishing write... 5/5

Although the beginning line for each stanza was the same, it never sounded like it was just repeating itself. You've chosen a great line to use, and you've used it so effectively for the poem! Astonishing write... 5/5