Comments : My nightmare

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    A fairly good poem...you rhyme nicely. My only suggestion is work on your flow and rhyme scheme a little more. Your first stanza doesn't flow like the others. But I liked this stanza the best!
    for you and i
    all is at stake
    will we bend
    or will we break

    Good job...keep going!
    Charisma*