Very good 5/5 i love this poem !!
its really sad
mexxx

A great read!! I thought you could of improved by putting more punctuation in it. But other then that, it was a great read! It was really sad and emotianal. Had alot of meaning. Keep it up! xx

A very deep, sad poem.. It was full of emotion. It was nicely written, although it didn't seem to have any set style of writing, however this didn't make it any less of a good poem.. I think You did really well with getting your feelings across in this.. well done 5/5 xx

Oh...my...god...i'm speechless...well...i suppose i'm not truly speechless...lol...this is AMAZING! wow...i loved it so much...you're going in my faves...i can relate to this poem so well...

Very good poem. i really liked it. keep up the good work. 5/5

Very nicely written..the language was beautiful!!...It sounded more like asong..but songs are just poetry with added music...so very nice..the flow was a bit off because of all the different stanzas...but its ok...well well done:):)

A very nice write i loved how you had some stanzas with a strict rhyme scheme but other it simply flowed without a strict one. i do that as well. it makes a different flow and gives me a change of pace when im writing. also, while reading i thought 'is this a song?" i thought it was lyrics lol. it really could be. it has so much raw emotion and amaxing wording. Great Job. , but i do think it oculd use some punctuation. =]

x.x:Lauren

This poem had great imagery and flow, outstanding job, i give it 5/5

The capitalization in strange parts kind of threw me off sometimes, but I still enjoyed this poem.

The title definitely fits well. I liked the different stanzas and the inconsistencies. The lack of repetition really works well.

Nice work! 5/5

Very good, its rather long but it still kept me intrigued. 5/5

Wow...awsome poem...good flow to it.....a 5/5 from me

This poem is full of a lot of emotion. I love your rhyming, and your vocabulary is simply amazing! I like how you emphazie(sp?) each word by repeating it, like you last lines reallly hit me. I love that whole last stanza the best. Amazing Job!

5/5

Wow is one word to put it> I really felt for you keep it up. Really liked the last stanza 5/5

So sad... with every word you used... it sunk deeper and deeper into me... the imagery was breath taking... i felt as if i was the one in your position... great write... keep it up!

~angel~

Well, it definitely has been a very long time since I've heard from you, and even longer since I've read your poetry. Let me tell you, you haven't lost your touch. This was a very good piece. Well written, well thoughout. I really liked the vivid images. It's good to have you back Naima. I missed you.

Excellent terrific job. It was a little long for me, but it was very strong and it kept my attention. Great emotion

Wow I love yet although it was a long poems but i enjoy reading this one the flow was amazingly great the rhythm of the poem was good and the rhyme scene was done very well greatly written and a wonderfull penned poem 5/5 from me

Geneross

Wow this is a long poem but i loved the meaning and it kept me in a trance excellent write 5/5

You still haven't commented on any of my poems

I already commented earlier this thing frickn rocks story of my life keep it up