Impotent {Lai}

by Natalie   Nov 29, 2006


Solitude cold mind,
Cascading behind,
Alone.
Impotent visions,
Calling decisions,
Afraid.
Paralyzed fingers,
Blaming who lingers,
Again.

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A Lai comprises of 5 syllable couplets separated by
a 2 syllable line. The number of lines in a stanza is 9.
Each group of couplets and 2 syllable lines follow the
rhyme scheme "aab"; this is derived from an old
French form.
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__This is really old. I cant remember when I wrote it, but I've never submitted it, So I thought I should. :]

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  • 17 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    Wow that was great 5/5 keep it up.

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow, it may be old but it's still a very good poem. I personally love the form of the poem, it's a form you don't see very often. The vocabulary in this one was amazing too. You're a very talented writer, keep it up! 5/5

    Stephanie

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    I was always fascinated by your formed poetry. Another good poem Nat, I don't really have much else to say on this one.

  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    I think this style of poem would be difficult, and you wrote this really well. Your word choice is always powerful and full of meaning, this is especially shown in this poem. I don't understand why the votes are so low, but i give this a 5/5 Great write!

    Tammie xo

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