An unusual poem, but I think we should all have a poem or too that goes into stuff most ppl don't think about much less write about. I love the Loch Ness monster so it was cool to see you mention it. Nice one!
Charisma* formerly Jpoet

Wow. This poem was so beautiful! I loved how you put your words together, and it flowed so nicely! Great Job! Keep it up! I will definitely go and check out some more of your poems. :)

Peace Always!

Wow... that was really good... i enjoyed it a lot... it was fun reading your poem... not many people who write poems about nature can make me like their work... but this one is different... i enjoyed it alot!! good job! keep it up!

~angel~

Oh Darien this is so beautiful. I love it from beginning to end, but "below" is my favorite stanza.

"Mermaids and sea monsters play
Yet they are never seen or heard
In areas where humans cannot go
A playground hidden deep below"

What an awesome piece, so pretty!

Hey D...very creative and original.
I love how your talent allows you to write about anything! Most enjoyable read my friend.

Another great piece by you good job the words flowed so well and it was beautifully written and very good topic everythign was great keep it up

AWESUME and AMAZING!!!!!!
that's soo detailed. WOW, ur really talented:)

Ok overall a good poem. but i feel the language could definantly be improved.
1. But we don't know much about it
do you not think you could use larger words. maybe unknown or /something/ else. also- pretty? there are better words than that.
But overall a good poem. i really liked the theme and ideas behind it. =]

x3 Lauren

This is a BEAUTIFUL POEM i loved it ~silent eyes~

Wow i liked the words u used and the way u wrote the poem. it was really good. =] keep it up. xx

Your imagination is inspiring.
I loved this poem, it was really good, the words flowed well and was so beautiful.
keep writing
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I don't know why, but this poem gave me goosebumps... Your rhymes and vocabulary are excellent. I liked this part the best:

Lost treasures buried in the ocean
A hundred miles below sea level
Unknown creatures on guard duty
Protecting riches of vast beauty

You really do have a nack for writing poems, Great Job Darien!

5/5

Ooh, interestingg. Lol, I find many of your poems quite amusing becuase you seem to add so much thinking into them =P All of them ask questions and contain information of some sort. If you understand what I mean? Lol. Anyway, this was good, it flowed well, and as I said before was interesting. I felt it could have been better though by a little more imagery. I know you already have a lot in there but I felt it was sort of lacking. But that might just be me. Anyways, great poem, keep it up hun. 5/5

Oh! Now I want to go to the Ocean and scuba dive or something. Haha.

I loved this poem, and the rhyming pattern of it. It made it flow nice and smooth, such an easy and delightful read. Lovely job.

This was beautiful.
The imagery you used was just...wow.
I liked this because it was different in concept.

Good, but not one of your better poems, i thought it was kind of elementary for you... but still, elementary for you is like totally advanced for someone else, so it was still a very good poem, i've just seen you write better... sry for the honesty, but still nice job

Another greatly written poem. you are great.

Hey,
I really enjoyed this poem. :)
I loved the imagery created and the magicalness about the poem. Your right in this poem, im sure i read osmewhere that we know mnore about space then we do about the ocean. So yeah it would be cool and yet very suprising if things like the Loch Ness Monster and mermaids did exist. The first stanza seems to be an introduction for your poem. The ship hasnt been dicovered and whatcould it hold? It makes the reader want ot find out what the ship holds. Then you go on to create this magical feel to it, you create an image of all these mytihical cretures. I have to say i loved it. The last stanza concludes the poem excellently, the mystery of the sea sounds really exciting. A lovely poem. Keep writing! Thank you for your comments! xx