Steps of time.

by broken barry   Nov 30, 2006


**this was supposed to be a song but o well**
as i sit here on the steps of time
i look for life which i can't find
as i sit here on the steps of time
i search for love and i can't find, a thing

i felt a drop of rain
then realize it's just the pain
i find a place where i can hide
and hope the memories do subside
my life consists of love and hate
how can i live in this sad state?

my heart has tricked me in the past
soon i will die at last
then it will all be over
as I'm trying to stay sober
depression is my cold hard whiskey

-barry nelson

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  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Very interesting. Nothing like my 'The Dreamer', but that's why I love it. I inspired you to write something completely out of hand and very well written indeed.

    I'd say your second stanza is your weakest, and the thrid the second weakest, but your into stanza was amazing and very strong. It DID remind me of The Dreamer, for how it was written.
    Nonetheless, I'm not here to critize. I really liked it and I'm glad I could inspire you. Hopefully more will inspire you and I'll come back and read more.=]

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Indigo Touch

    Wow. this is soo moving. uve got some really origonal talent and a poinant imagination. write more soon!

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