Wow. this is soo moving. uve got some really origonal talent and a poinant imagination. write more soon!

Very interesting. Nothing like my 'The Dreamer', but that's why I love it. I inspired you to write something completely out of hand and very well written indeed.

I'd say your second stanza is your weakest, and the thrid the second weakest, but your into stanza was amazing and very strong. It DID remind me of The Dreamer, for how it was written.
Nonetheless, I'm not here to critize. I really liked it and I'm glad I could inspire you. Hopefully more will inspire you and I'll come back and read more.=]

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