Wow, a very sad one but like always written so greatly..........
i specially love your rhyming, they are so great. nothing less than a 5/5 cause you really deserve it........
keep up the best job like always. 5/5

This was sad yet it was touching. Something seemed to linger in me once I finished reading this poem. This poem was full of meaning unlike others I have read. I loved the way the rhyming was. I gave it a 5/5! Please keep writing and I will read more!

Kiara

Wow... that was just great... short but you can feel and imagine everything... you need not much words to describe... emphasizing something by repeating the words was a great idea... loved it... 5/5!

~angel~

Nice poem. Like the style of the poem and the ending, though it was prospecting. First sentences is lovely, so overal a great poem. 5/5

I liked the rhymes. The flow was pretty good too. Liked the ideas, and you developed them well. Good job on this poem.

Very good poem. i loved it. 5/5 keep up the good work.

Oh my. wow. this is just wonderful. it is really sad, but you did such an excellent job on writing it. i like how you repeated the words in the 3rd stanza and then again in the 4th. the poem flowed so nicely together. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

Wow i can feel those words going right into my skin to my heart!!!

The pain remains,
Only now its in her head.
it hurts, it hurts
It still hurts is what she said.

i really like this part how you tell about pain and pain do hurt!!! your so good...keep up the good work!!!
-teardrop

Wow, that really was a great poem... i liked the style, i have never seen something with that type of style.

One too many pills,
She popped with some gin.
her heart. Her Heart.
Her heart stopped beating within.

favorite lines, i like how you repeat it all the time... really nice job on this poem 5/5

Ooh, I really like this hun! I love the repitition, I think it really adds effect to the poem. The details you used were simple but still brought the desired effect. It flowed well and the rhymes were pretty good. Nice job 5/5

This was such a relatable poem... intense and flowed along really well the repeating of lines made it really good... wel written x

Wow.. this is a really good poem. I especially liked the second stanza. That one seemed to have the most emotions shown in it & it stood out to me the most.. I really really liked this poem! 5/5

Wow, that was excellent. Very unique style here. The repition of each word in every fourth line was a very creative idea. Wonderful work.

Thanks for the comment on my poem "What About Now?" I wrote it for a contest and i wrote it in about 5-10mins I just wanted to enter the contest and get it done before someone used the Title.. and also the poem had to rhyme. i know they are kind of forced but i tired i just wanted to write the poem fast and i was in a hurry, but thank you very much for your commenting and telling me the truth.

...Different style. Not exactly one I enjoy but it does a good job with the idea. The repetition of the third lines almost reminds me of a song. The rhyming was cool and remained in good flow without sounding forced. Nice job.
~Faith-less

This is great writieng, nice wording, many can relate, as i can see, well.. check out osme of my writiengs, there not bad lol
-Marina

This poem is awesom!! good work!!

Amazing

That is such a great poem. it really grabs at ya. i love the repetition. totally makes the poem! nice work hun! great stuff.

I like this one, it didn't flow as well as maybe it could but it was still very good. sad and powerful imagery within. good words. keep writing
xxxxx