This poem was super powerful and meaningful.i loved it!
i think the repititon really helped with how it flowed =]
great job.
--lexie♥

.. I had to ask my parents what gin was... hehe... -blonde moment- Anyways... this poem was freaky! I liked it though. You are a really great poet.

Issues:

None! I loved everything. I liked how on every third line you had doubles, they really add emphasis. I loved it!

Excellent

5/5

AHAH. congrats for having soo many people like this poem. and truly, it is very well penned. there are lil typos i think. make sure you spell check the poems.

5/5

I see why it was on there... it was really good, great job, good wording, great flow. 5/5

This was good, very sad. And really realistic.. Um, the repitition kinda throwed me off a little, idk why. But, I really wasn't too fond of it. But, i still liked it. Just not my favorite from you. Good job though. It flowed well. 4.5

Bri.x

That poem there...its a beautious thing =)

I don't normally comment on poems that have been voted and comment on so much but this title pulled me in. I am glad it did cause this is a awesome poem.

I'm personally not a fan of suicide poems, they're too overused for my liking, but that's my opinion of subject.
I think it was good, you used emotion to portray the situation. The flow and rhyme was good too, there was no sign of forced rhymes.
I think though you may have gone slightly overboard with the repetition. It's a good tool when used in moderation, but it was just bit too much for me here.
Also, on the second line of the second stanza, it should be "it's," as an apostrophe should be used when representing the conjunction "it is."
Thanks for sharing.

I love this one... its a lot like some of the poems ive written

I like this poem but i had to read it twice to understand it... and uhm in the first stanza it seems like you tried to hard to rhym the "2" with you. because then you put the (00) there so i then understood but anywhoo. it was still a good poem. great job!!

No mere words could describe what i was feeling when i read this poem.......... all i can say is keep up the great work

Its really good... love the structure of the whole poem... the way you wrote the words... it flowed really good... yet it was very sad! keep it up!