That was excellent! Everything seemed to flow perfectly, and the words and phrases you used were just brilliant. Good job.

Amazing.. Simply Brilliant. Truly.

there were only 2 tiny things i could even say anyhting about-
Though she was condemned of a murder, i think this line should be a few syllables longer to enhance the flow.
and - big red
big red.. c'mon! 2 three-letter adjectives! i mean really! maybe instead - Though the swollen crimson marks? huh huh? lol.

sorry buti really love this poem. i love the repeating of the 1 words. and the metaphors and the rhyme sheme and how it changed.

Simply Amazing. =]

x3 Lauren

I really enjoyed reading your poem! Keep up the great work!

You are a very talented writter. I enjoy your work. The flow is good as well as the strucutre and the rhyming is outstanding. Wonderful Job!!!

Peace, Joe