This poem is fantastic, your ryhming scheme is perfect, well done.
Jade

Awww i loved this poem altho it has a sad feel to it, the rhyming scheme was great, written sooo well :D

~*~Jen~*~

Very nice poem,
i do really like this poem, greatly written.........5/5 from me.

Awwww wow sweet poem c

WWWOOOWW, ur poem that u wrote was so excellent it had so much emotion 2 it, n it was nice 2 read something like this, although while reading this, it made me remember something that was the same 2 me, well enough with that. All i have 2 say is that ur poem was EXCELLENT 5/5

It was a nice poem and i love the idea, just the thing that makes a great poem for me is the vocabulary. this poem was elementary vocabulary, and don't get me wrong, half my poems are the same way, and a lot of the vocabulary will come naturally with time as you get older and learn new words to place in where they fit. next time, just try to see even if you could use a thesaurus to make it a little less elementary, a little more maturely written, but please dont just flip through and use big words if you dont know what they are... that drives me nuts, they don't flow then... don't get me wrong, i really did like this poem, i just room for improvement, and i'm trying to give constructive criticism, if it was hurtful to you, please let me know, i didn't mean it like that! i'll read a couple others. keep up the good work though, there's talent in there, it just needs to shine.

This poem was well written. it had a sad love mood to it. and everything seemed to fit together. well done.

Wow! Love the emotion! Wonderfully written!
5/5
xoxo

Wow! Love the emotion! Wonderfully written!
5/5
xoxo