Less Than Average.

by Ironic Allure   Dec 1, 2006


Step one, let it go,
because this as much as we can be.
this is the wrong time to be thinking of you,
when all our sand castles are collapsing,
and i only know how to build more,
on an unfamiliar part of the shore.
perhaps the silence is letting me down here.
i've been sitting for hours and i'm no where near,
a question a reason or an answer.
i thought we were better than average,
whatever the hell that is.
we were past it.
these are the words i wish i wrote down,
when the music wasn't louder than my voice.
i'm not sure we can change things around.
nobody can tell where my heart is,
because you're happy wasting away,
knowing we're less than average.
yeah let's let the sky fall down,
we'll dance in clouds and paddle the rain,
so long as you remember, this was your doing;
we'll never build castles again.
once time is on your side you'll find,
that this is the song i wrote for you,
for the gig you were too busy to see.
and this is the place that you'll run to,
when you need somebody like me.

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  • 17 years ago

    by limp

    Heyyyyy laura,
    Yeah, its a good poem, u dont deserve diz comment vo, its lyk, rly good, sum gud metaphors, yeah, lyke a song, pretty damn gud, yeah, s'abit good n, sht n stuff. Yea. Rly like how u portrayed sum lines by referin to love as a spotted dog.

    Yea, again, I lyk it, I fink it shows who u r, a lowlife pees of crap. And i really fink it shows how u feel about diz boy, lyk, u really like him n want to do him, n stuff.

    It really amazes me how u can write about the same thing so amazingly similar in evri poem n get away wit it.

    *Wimpers*@ur face. Ye, i like it, duckface :]

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A true heartfelt poem, nicely written. I never got the chance of reading your poems but I regrated as you are a great poet.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jeffrey

    Heyyyyyyyy laura,

    this comment might not be one of those amazing comments that touch your heart like all my others, because well, it's mad late right now, but i dragged myself over to the computer anyways 'cos I promised.

    Mmm, first off, I really like this one, because while reading it, it's so easy to relate to. I think everyone experiences these emotions at least once, and this poem is a beautiful way to sum up all the thoughts that go through one's mind at the time.

    Although you can immediately feel close to this poem, that doesn't mean it doesn't also sound very personal. It sounds very laura-esque, knowing you a bit, I can see your personality dashed in here or there. you may have pulled a few lines from songs here or there, but I still think you managed to keep it yours.

    Oh, I also wanted to add, whenever reading your poems, the flow is very song-like, and fun to read. I make a few words rhyme and thats poetry enough for me, yours seems to come a lot more natural.

    stand out parts would be the really cool shore metaphore (ooh I am a poet), and the gig too busy to see.
    also the whole 'less than average' title, that really ties everything together so well.

    all righty this comment was both sufficiently long and homo. I credit you for inspiring this comment by providing me with the background information behind this poem.
    hope everything works out for the best duckface :]

  • 17 years ago

    by AntiSocial16

    I like the sand castle metaphor. very nice touch

  • 17 years ago

    by A F

    While i was reading this. my tears were falling. for the fact that i'm touched with this poem and i just broke up witj my bf. ='(

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