Wonderfully written peice of poetry. I loved it.

This line, "But am not no more," should be, "But am not anymore,"

And the "O" in this line, "O how lonely am I," Should be, "Oh"

The Flow and the structure was great. Keep up the wonderful work.

Peace, Joe

Very good, good structure, flowed well, a lovely piece
xxxx

Fairly well written...

Now all I know is sadness,
Now that you are gone,

I think that you shouldn't use 'now' at the beginning of a sentence twice in a row.

The first three stanzas are very repetitive about how you're no longer loved and begins to sound more like a depressing poem rather than a sad love poem.

In this lonely world,

Oh how lonely am I

Using lonely twice like that is kinda repetitive as well.

Good write just needs a little bit of tweaking. ^^

After a while the reader will get the picture that the person is gone and that the speaker has loved once: etc. It is again telly instead of trying to include the reader it resorts to begging the reader to understand. It is a good starter poem though. Keep working at it.

Aww wow this is really sad, but at the same time it is really sweet of you to write this. i'm sorry if this is true. you did a great job on it though! 5/5

~Kristina

This was so sad, yet it was also sweet.
My favourite part was

My one true love,
For I belong with you.

I can definitely relate to that.

On the whole, I thought it was, as always, very well written and structured and I enjoyed all of it.

Hey Britney, it's me Andre.

Beautiful job. The last stanza was simple but refreshing. You could have used less "I"s and more imagery. Good job overall!

I was at a poetry battle last weekend and this one girls poem was set up like this. loved it, keep it up thx for taking time to rrc my poem :)

Well. this isnt bad, but its not great. it is slightly repetitive and just kind of annoying. it seems is so depressing. it kinda got me mad. -sorry- also you used many words more than once in a short.. um vacancy? ex-now, then on the next line now again.

Good but need to be worked on a little.

x3 Lauren

Oh this poem is so good, i hope you are ok =) 5/5

Good job, love it, 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Damn, i suspect that this didnt really happen to you but i wasnt expecting death, it made me think about my boy however which is good lol. well done

xxx alex xxx

I know how you feel...I think that this poem was pretty good because I could relate to it a lot. I know exactly how you feel and reading this poem mkes me think about another love story Of my own nice work

I can relate to this. Other than a few grammer errors I think you did a great ob 5/5

I really liked this poem it showed a really good flow..but I know the title is once.. but it doesn't really mean you should use it often.. the first stanza.. I think you used once three time.. not so sure.. but all together you used once like 4 or 5 time in a poem.. that way tooo much.. srry ... Im very blunt once again.. anyway good job and keep up the good work though 4/5

The flow was off a little, but nothing major. The word usage was really good and this piece had a lot of emotion to it. I loved reading it simply because of the emotion I felt coming from it... very good write.

I was happy once so long ago,
but now you're gone,
^^ simple and very effective... these were my two favorite lines.

5/5 for sure!

How very sad, to want to die at your age for love...I do understand, though..some people can touch us in such a way, we feel we will never love that way again.
You did a good job on expressing your emotions:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

I relate to the poem because It was exactly like that with me and this girl, but now we are the best of friends. [5\5]