You have something to say that a lot of people don't like to hear about. Your pain is so deep. Ii have someone in my family that is in this place. I feel the pain of this.

Its good to get your emotions out, but as for the poem alone, its hard to find a beat...no need to ryhmn but maybe some more length..i'm not sure but its missing someting...keep your head up and I am here to talk if you ever need to..

I agree with Melissa, its hard to find a beat with this poem but with me it's really important what the last lines say and the last to lines in this poem were amazing.

This was so sad, I have tears in my eyes.
This was beautifully written, refreshing and brutally honest.
You did a great job on such a hard topic to write about.

I related to this poem,cos my friends do that too,and i get angry with them because of that...
'Even the life seems too lousy,it doesn't worth to kill yourself'
Take care of yourself and don't worry i wanna feel your smile
See ya honey
Laura