"let moments halt,
but breaths hold each halted moment together,"
I dont think you should repeat youself so soon it kinda makes it cheesy
but overall I liked it. It was sweet and full of emotion. There were some parts better then others that I liked. I deeply liked the rhymes and I like how you linked them together. And I normally dont like love poems so for me to like one i something. I would give you a 5/5 or 4.5/5 for the repetiveness. yea but il gicve you the whole 5. Please return the favor, read one of my featured.
sincerely
~skittles

Well done, Travis. This was awesome, and i mean it! Every line was passionate, heartwarming, captured me frome the start.
an excellent piece of poetry, keep writing
you have talent
xxxxx

Amazing.. and this is your first poem?? i wish i'd started out like this.. lol. even without a rs(rhyme scheem) it flowed ecsquisitly(Sp?). i loved the metaphors and just the theme and imagery.
Great Job

x3 Lauren

(A return of the favor,
would be such a treat
Cause, boy you got talent.
And seem pretty neat)

i did not write that. xD

Woww. Veryy well written. I really loved it! You could feel your emotions and your love just flowing from the lines.

Very good poem. Keep up the good work. 5/5

Great poem you got there. 5/5 keep it up. Dont worry if people dont think its good becouse its great for your first. I only have 6 poems my self and some people dont like them but it doesnt matter as long as you did your best.=]

Travis...it was ahmazing...but i dont think that was inteded for me....

I love your poems...you do so much better than me...i can tottaly sence jelousy...lol