by REL Dec 2, 2006
category :
Life, society /
other
Broken hearted with broken dreams |
by Tim Mauntler
I like the poem |
by Nix
I like the idea of the poem, very interesting topic. You would create more powerful atmosphere with adding some more punctuation. Also, it would be easier to read if it's in stanzas. You sounded really frustrated in the end of this piece, it wasn't good like the beginning which leaves bad impression. You expressed emotions in a good way. |
by REL
I am hope you is too |
Great poem pretty sad hope your ok =( |
AY U!!!! this is on ur myspace aint it....... i love it!!! |