Your poems are very good....and you have a raw talent. You are good now, and I can't wait to see how your poetry grows with you. It will be even better in just a few months if you keep writing like you are. !!!!
Charisma*

I agree your poems are great you leave alot of emotion ihn your poems which is a great thing to have alot of poepl like to read this kinda stuff well keep it up
luv ya,
Christina

This is beautiful. a powerful opening, with each stanza thereafter just getting better and better. the only thing i would suggest for this is to change the last line so that you don't use the word fade twice...maybe shrivel and fade? or something along those lines. other than that, i thought this was wonderful.