The first one shows a lot of emotion, the second one is a dialogue, an unusual but in this case good chosen combination.
Keep on writing, with me, it helps to make up my mind and write pain of me.

Love this. it really hit me hard cause this is sumthing i have been thru. its what really goes thru ur mind when u decide to stop eating. keep up the good work. :)

This poem is so powerful, i have had a few friends who have gone through this and at one point i almost resorted to it but thought it through and decided not to....this is a wonderful poem!=]