I loved this one.

Very true explination of the loneliness that is indeed felt as you explained. Last couple of lines sum it up for me, tell me because I cant stand the loneliness ... fool :P

Well done

This was a really deep and profound piece of work. Kind of reminds me of...Me.

Although the flow was a little choppy at times, [not anything that can't be overlooked], the messagae was, like I said, profound.

Great job on this and keep it up.

Happiness
Jeannie

Wow. This was very good. Great job!

I thought it was good and you did a great job of describing the loneliness of it. 5/5
~Danni~

I enjoyed reading your poem, I thought it had good wording and excellent flow. My favorite line was --
"Loneliness is bitter, and it's a taste I cannot like
But empty love is worthless, and isn't worth the fight."
So very true. Thank you for sharing your talent and keep up the outstanding work, I can't wait to read more of your poems!!!

"But empty love is worthless, and isn't worth the fight."

Such deep and meaningful words. So true...

This poem isn't like your other poems and while the flow seemed a bit stilted at times, it was still easy to read and easy to find a rhythem, which is one of the first things i look for when reading a poem.
This seemed like a very deep love poem with some very well thought out words.
Well thats how i interpreted it (sp?) (another word i can never spell =)
So although it's not like your other work, i really enjoyed reading this one.
(Excellent - Tara)
5/5
Gem and Tara

(And in case you were wondering, Tara is one of the judges who voted yours top, although i wasn't supposed to know that, lol)

Congratulations on winning. x

Cute poem.. good rhyme.. okay flow.. its a good poem just not my favorite.. i couldnt get into this as much as the others

Aww...
I enjoyed reading the poem
definently the last couple of lines...
thanks for comment on my poem

I think this piece has good rhythm and rhyme. Very heartfelt. Great job!

Comment #4:

This was very passionate and sadening because of the way you long for him. You did an exellent job describing that feeling. I like it when I can feel what is being described and I can here. Wonderful job! :)
~Midnight Sun