I really liked this poem. it is very good and deep. keep up the good work. you are a great poet:) 5/5

This was good. I could certainly feel your pain and terror ( I notice you like that word, it's used in both poems you asked me to read).
My favourite two lines were the last of the first stanza and the last of the final stanza, to me those were very vivid and quite originally written.
The overall flow was good for the most. What did hinder it slightly though was the fact some rhymed and some didn't. If you were to stick to a fixed way, either a rhyme scheme or free verse it would read more consistantly.
This is quite a popular (some say overused/cliche) subject, therefore I did notice some of the old (overused) descriptions sneeking in there. It may be difficult with this subject, but all in all it would make the poem a stronger piece if there were more new and creative descriptions and ideas.
For example instead of saying "you hurt me" or "I cry" think of something concrete to compare your hurt or tears to, like sandpaper on an open wound, or moist memories (as you seem to use the memory concept often in this write). Those are just ideas and suggestions, you don't have to take them, I'm just thinking aloud.
Thanks for sharing anyway, I enjoyed the read.