This is a great poem. and is written just right. this a beautiful poem. keep up the good work:) 5/5

What's this delicate soun, what could it be?
A sweet sond is heard in the air,

^^ Here, I am assuming that both times it should be "sound"

Darting through the shinning summer air,
^ Here, it should be "shining"

This was nicely done hun. The only thing that I really didn't like was how you kept using the same words. Some of them I know you had to repeat because of the repitition but some you repeated jsut for the sake of it. Try using different words and it will sound better. Also, I think it would also be easier to read if you actually seperated the poem up into the stanzas it is supposed to be in. This is all jsut my opinion though, nicely done. 5/5

Very beautiful poem. I like the repetition of mentioning sound in some way. It makes the poem seem more realistic.

Enjoyable to read.

Lol, I remember trying this style. I was a little bit confusing at first. You did a nice job.