Very interesting, I liked it. The flow and structure was good. Good Job at a free verse poem. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

An excellent poem I really liked it, the way and the style it is written in.
A good write, keep it up.

The Angel of Secrets

Very good poem. It definetly describes the weather here. I really liked the lines
"A sprinkle here,
And a sprinkle there"
It made the storm seem somehow gentle.

The imagery created here was wonderful. I really loved how the storm was described, and then everything went back to normal, seemingly as if it didn't happen.

Nicely penned.

Great poem!

people have downvoted my lyrics "Hold On, Move Along" so I have deleted it and reposted it can you please leave your comment on it again and voted =]
this is what you said

It is great. you are a great song writer and poet. Keep up the great work.5/5

thank you!

I like it better then allot of the ones you have done. Its good. keep it up . I would put more thought into this comment but i dont like one liner comments I recieve

Okay, I loved this. It painted a thunderstomr (my favorite thing) so vividly in my head. I've got one called Thunderstorm Tears in my favs and I wrote it cuz of my love for em...great job!
Charisma*

This is new to me but i loved your poem. Gave me alot to picture and gave great details 5/5

Nice poem... i like it an it describes a storm well..

That was really good. I loved all the metaphors you used. The flow was good and the imagery was great. Maybe think about a better title though. Nicely done 5/5

Imagery was extremely cool and vivid...stayed focused and consistent throughout with the idea of the storm. The beginning definitely set it up and the descriptions were excellent. Cool job.
~Faith-less

Clouds roll in from the east,
Across the violet sky,
Like waves out at sea.
^So glad to see the simile has not died out!

The thunder rolls,
And the ground quacks,
As lightning of purple,
Flashes across the dark sky.
The wind picks up,
And tree branches bend,
Till they nearly touch the ground.
^ Great imagery here although the commas aren't necessary at the end of every line.

Then comes the rain.
A sprinkle here,
And a sprinkle there.
Then it comes with vegans,
In slanting sheets,
So thick that none could see.
^ Again, the imagery here is good. No critique for this stanza :)

Then just like that,
The storm is gone.
And all is still,
And fresh once more.
^ Perfect ending. As the storm ends and the mood of the poem changes, so does the structure.

5/5

I loved this.
You have a lot of talent for free verse.
Again, the imagery was amazing.

Lil prob-
quacks,.. the ground is a duck?i thnk you mean quake.lol

But thats about it. it flowed very well and it was very descriptive. it painted a great picture in my mind. whats a vegan? lol.. thats the only part i do not get. i also loved how it just stopped, and everything kind of went back to the wqay it was. as though it never happened. i think this has many deeper meanings..

Good job.

x3Lauren

I jsut commented.. but apparently it didn submit.. odd but w/e

lol. Quack Quack im a duck.. i think you mean quake...lol

but thats the only thing icould find wrong at all in this poem. it is penned wonderfully. the imagery is awesome. and the details are great. it flowed well and i love the change of pace at the end. i think this has many deeper meanings as well. great job

x3 Lauren

Oh. it did post. oh well.. xD

Wow this is a very powerful peice. 5/5 Keep writing :D
~Kyra~

Great free-style. Nice use of descriptions. It ended perfectly

Another good poem!!! 5/5!!!

Aww I like this one! Reminds me a little about a song by Samantha Mumba and a little bit of a short story I read in AP lit. great job