Never ending sunset

by The Angel of Secrets   Dec 4, 2006


I wish the sunset would never fade,
but it will, and I'll hold on to the memories we made.
Going down the beach, an endless walk,
No need for words, no need to talk.
Waves touch our wandering feet,
as maybe once our look might meet.
Maybe perhaps you'll hold my hand,
as we leave footprints soft in the sand.
The wind might get cooler, and I might get a cold,
But I won't even care, cause this moment is gold.
Nothing matters if we are together,
and I'll hold on to this memory forever and ever.

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  • 18 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Awww.. this is so cute and romantic i lovelovelove love it! hehe :]P and i espescially love this line "Going down the beach, an endless walk,
    No need for words, no need to talk"

    its so cute idk why lol i just really like this poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    I liked your poem - nice and sweet... May love treat you kindly.

  • 18 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    That is a really good poem. You rhymed really well, but it's so weird cause I have one almost exactly like it! It's called creating memories. I'd love it if you checked it out!
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 18 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Walks on the beach, an endless walk,

    this one line I think you could use revision so that walk isn't used twice.

    Going down the beach, an endless walk

    Maybe like that. But other than that, this was so beautiful and I loved it. It's one of the best poems I've read today. Good job!
    Charisma*

  • 18 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Very beautiful.

    "Walks on the beach, an endless walk,"

    This was the only line I didn't particularly like, due to the repetition of 'walk'. It made it sound awkward. If you changed the second 'walk' to something else, it would be a lot better.

    Anyhow, very good. 5/5.

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