by jack Dec 4, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
I remember those days were we would laugh together |
P.S. |
Outside of making some different changes in the structure (like putting 'of tyrant blue' in 2nd stanza as one complete line-which would make this great description/image stand out more) this piece is really outstanding. Overall a good flow, some excellent imagery, great word usage, and very well conveyed emotion of love and contentment. A great piece! |