I just wrote a long comment but my fricken stupid father got on and it is gone. so i really do not care.
in short-
good, not great. dissapearence of rhyme scheme messed up the flow. i think that needs to be changed, along with this line -
Cutting more and more is what she'll do.
it irks me i dont like it. but now i gtg again. sorry.

x3 Lauren

I found this to be very sad.
The flow threw me off at times, because of the way it sometimes rhymed and sometimes didn't, but apart from that, it was a beautifully written sad piece of poetry.