Fried bread and a broken heart

One suggestion maybe make the last line just, "Fried bread and broken heart." Maybe it will flower better with that. Your poem was alright but while it had some good in it by showing somebody not doing things as they fell apart in their own heartache, I felt you could have expanded on each one. I felt a stranger to your poem and not included sadly. Like I said just try expanding it a bit.

Sarah, I love this poem. It has a certain je ne se quoi. I have no idea what that means, but I do know that it's a good thing. Beautiful...

I love this poem even though I don't like cats but cats aren't what the poems about. It has the feel of down but not suicidal down. Good job

p.s. I love fry bread

I loved this poem. Can relate my boyfriend justbrock up with me and eating is one way I deal with. Though it is not the best way. 5/5

Ummm.... what're you sad about? Like, what did this person do to you to make you fill such hurt ache? You should a few stanzas that say what he did without actually saying it. It's kinda short but other than that, awesome job! 4/5