Okay...I love the poem overall, but I'm not entirely crazy about the lines inbetween, sometimes they seem to flow with it, and sometimes they don't. But I love the message with it. It's a very good poem, and it's always nice to see something different.
Charisma*

Unconventional my ****!!!
Hehe, i agree with Laura, this can work as a song as well which is why i love it all the more!
How do you do it? Your words always flow like water over my tongue...
Amazing work as always
5/5
*Gem*

Very good poem! i enjoyed reading this very much! i like the repetition, it added a lot!

i really don't have it in me to go in detail. im sorry.. but this poem is really good! =D

i feel like a one liner... ahh so i have to say something.

to me it seems the stanza breaks, if this were being read aloud would be whispered and that is wicked cool. also,this is my fave part:
I need us
I believe in us becoming one
. it just flowed really well.

great job!

xoxoxoxox
:Lola