Wonderful rhyming you did in this poem. it was simply a great poem, sad but well written 5/5

~Kristina

This is really a great poem. I love it.

My favoret lines are

This is why I cry my tears,
This is why I hide my fears.

These lines I do relate to because there a person who made me cry and I hide my fears.

Please keep up the good work. Never stop writing. 5/5

Great poem. Good use of words, and i like the rhyming scheme. Keep writing!
5/5
~Stevie

THAT WAS AWSOME

SIGNED,
MAIDISON

Great poem 5/5 keep it up..

Wow ur an amazing writer and the way you writei can tell we have alot in common because of our pasts...you can e-mail me at ashewebster@ndaviess.k12.in.us if ya ever need to talk....thnx for your vote and comment i was deeply touched its always nice to kno that there is always someone who feels ur pain...

I'll tell you what i think all right..

I think you some amazing talent!
Wonderful repetition of the two main lines, they really add effect to the overall poem.
Some excellent rhyming too!
Well done hun!
5/5 definitely!
*Gem*

WOW.
My favourite.
This was so sad, yet such a pleasure to read.
I loved it!

I think this is pretty dang good! I think the only thing you can fix is you puncuation, and:

Everything is falling apart
As I look at my shattered and broken heart.
This is why I cry my tears
This is why I hide my fears.

Your second line is too long, maybe try:

Everything is falling apart,
As I look at my broken heart.

I don't know, great poem, awesome rhyming.

You did an amazing job!

5/5

Lovely ryming, flowed realy nicely throughout the whole poem, also loved the last line!!!

Very good poem! I really liked it.
Very sad too. Keep up the great work.
God Bless 5/5

~Tay~

This is a good poem, loved the flow, like the way it resembles lyrics, i give this poem a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Bryan,

OMG, one of the greatest poem i ever read in my life.
It is very emotional and well written. I also luv your flow and the rhyming.great job and keep up the great work. I have to add you to my favorite list as i dont want to miss your great poetry now. 5/5

Wow, great structure, a very uniquely written poem, its very interesting and flows quite well. great job 5/5

I'm going to be honest.. I don't like it. You repeaditively kept rhyming the same words and it really ruined the poem.
It didn't seem to have much feeling in it, either, I'm sorry to say..I just didn't feel this poem.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex4.5

I liked how you made all the words ryme the same way in the 1st 2 stanza.also, the 5 lined stanza in the middle was different but it worked. the ending had only three lines so i think it helped make a better ending!the flow was a little off in the 4th stanza because of the 2nd line in it but the structure was good. although i loved the 4th stanza because the word choice was the best there.all in all i loved this poem. i felt as if it was me writing it because i related to how you felt. great job! 4/5

I liked how you made all the words ryme the same way in the 1st 2 stanza.also, the 5 lined stanza in the middle was different but it worked. the ending had only three lines so i think it helped make a better ending!the flow was a little off in the 4th stanza because of the 2nd line in it but the structure was good. although i loved the 4th stanza because the word choice was the best there.all in all i loved this poem. i felt as if it was me writing it because i related to how you felt. great job! 4/5

Oops..i commented twice lol sorry!

It is just brimming with sorrows.. the way you repeat the two lines

This is why I cry my tears
This is why I hide my fears.

so as to emphasize it, is really tormenting... Great job!

Great Poem... But sad. I use to feel like that alot... I think alot of other people feel like that too! Well written... 5/5

~Shae