LeAvE...

by LuvLyLynn   Dec 5, 2006


As you leave I can feel my heart darkening. (You were my light, my pathway to where i needed to be.)
As you take each step away from me, I could feel a piece of my heart fall to the ground. (You were always there, to help me through all that I was going through.)
As you reach for the door, my mind twists and turns. (You had me falling for you deeply and madly.)
And as you walk out, my soul has left me. (You were my other half that made me whole and without you I feel incomplete...)

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  • 17 years ago

    by RavishingEruption

    Really good way to explain a break up or seperation
    amazing job! i loved it!!

  • 18 years ago

    by LovinMyLife

    I LOVE IT!!!!! You are soooooo good! And I'm NOT just saying that! I love love love your poems!
    Thank you so much for your comment on my poem it means so much to me!
    Burning~Wings

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    I really liked this. You definitely portrayed your emotions very well in this and I think that your thoughts that you put in parentheses gave the poem a very nice and sad effect. Great job on this! 5/5
    And thank you for your comment on my poem :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Gem

    "And as you walk out, my soul has left me. (You were my other half that made me whole and without you I feel incomplete...)"

    A very powerful ending, it really gets the point across how you feel at the end.
    I agree with Silence. This style is excellent, i haven't seen one like this before.
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 18 years ago

    by silence

    I really like this one as well. I like the style of writing. I only wish I could write like that. Keep writing :)

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