The Void

by xXx Allison xXx   Dec 5, 2006


And so one can see me
standing here alone
searching for someone
who I don't even know
Someone to hold me
To love me
To let me cry
But there's no one there.

I see so many nice faces
some are handsome princes
some are less than that
but no matter where you go
they always hold you back.
You're willing to give
them all your heart
but they don't really care.

For what are you searching?
Is it really what you think?
Do you know what to look for?
So think for a moment
what you're after.
Is it really a man
A guy meant to love you?
Or is it just the void
a meaningless void
that grates on your nerves
and sets your concience
on its wrong end.
And so you are looking
constantly looking
and think that love
short-term love
internet love
random love
can fill this deep hole
this growing hole
this place in your mind
that threatens to suck in
everything about you
the void.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Colby

    Hmmm it was good, but i know it could be better. But good job... 5/5 ps. HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Pianist

    Words such as "and, I, you" are subjective and often ruin the rhythm, or flow of the poem. Of course there are many cases where such words are necessary, but for example:

    "And so no one can see me"

    And is very unnesessary and hampers the flow.

    This is a poem very much in your mind, and your mind alone. I say that because I have no idea what it means. You must ellaborate and tell your reader exactly what you want them to know. The more specific you are the easier your message will be conceived and cherished. Follow a guideline of sorts, such as telling a story, or recalling a memory.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridget

    Awesome! good work I'm goin to check out your other poems

  • 17 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    I like the void for numerous different reasos, so i loved that ending. but i think that you shouldm describe more; as in "how they hold you back",.. etc.. lats part seems just like the narrator talking to themself. "grates" isnt really a right word for a void, if you see what i mean? maybe it's just me but it's a weird word choice. but i do l ike it and the fluidity, cpherency overall..

  • 17 years ago

    by Tite

    This had a nice flow to it, I really liked it. Keep up the good work n God bless.

    Stay Playa,
    SC

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