Good job on the poem! You have alot of talent! Keep writing!

I lay empty,
drowning in sorrow and tears.
i wanna be anywhere but here.

*I love the iamgery here. It such a sad way to start a poem, but it makes me want to keep reading*

u made me hate myself,
with every inch of my soul.
losing myself within each day,
evaporating from being whole.

*Love the diction. I like your style. Changing the length of the stanas is very creative*

the wind makes my tears run down my cold face,
trying to run away from myself,
but still stuck in the same place.

*I think this was my favorite stanza. I love how you talk about the wind. Such an emotional piece*

holding my breathe,
and hoping to disappear,
but god loves to torture,
sucked back into the atmosphere.

*Wow...this last stanza blew me away. Your emotions got alot more intense here. Very nice poem. You have such a way with words. Nik*