That is so sad and I do not know what to say it was simply amazingly sad but dood all at the same time great job hugs and kisses8

Good job jason..its great

I feel you could definatly expand on this poem :D it's really good. Great job Jas. :D

I Love it It describes a person i know well.... its really good jason

Laura

I can relate totally, i love this poem 5/5 definately

Really good description in this poem. It had a good flow, and good usage of vocab. I think to improbve was the punctuation usage. You should use it, it can be really helpful. (Im no good at punctuation but still). Still a good read, keep it up! xx

GREAT

I know hte feeling its liek you've lost control of your life..you have nop control over ur feelings your locked inside ur self..i know the feeling..great job love the discriptions 5/5 ur so in my favs, keep up the great writing

lissa

Damn dark and scurry!!! *hides behind u*

Jason
this describes the hurt that everyone has felt before it is so great and i love the pattern and form of the poem its real good keep it up

I like this one too ur really good!

I really loved the intention behind the words of this poem.how the demons awake to take controland all your soul can do is watch as they destroy and hurt everything.good work. the only downside i'd personally say is that its flow wasn't perfect. it halted in some places. but nevertheless i love it
Rocky
Love is the law, Love under will

My eyes are widened in awe and amazement, you just can't see them.