Good one, but the end is not so strong like its start, well done :)

I loved the start with the first 4 stanzas, but the 5th one seemed to be a little off because it didnt flow like the others and if you dont mind i'd like to make a correction, nothing big, just to change the ther to the in the line after the fifth stanza. Its just my opinion but overall, it a Job Well Done.