Comments : Am I Losing You?

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    First off, thanks for ALL your nice comments. Always appreciated! Second off, this is a good poem, could really see it.
    One suggestion is in this stanza.
    Lost within each other
    To all others we were blind
    Gazing at each other
    Trying to read the others mind
    I think you overused the word other(s). Maybe you could redo that one stanza. Just a suggestion to help!
    Charisma*