Great poem, very chilling! especially loved the alliteration of the last line "minds without meaning", it created a very nice effect indeed. :D

keep it up.

xXx

Walking these floors
Polished to perfection
With hazy smoked doors
I see no reflection

This poem's (although short) has massive lyrics. loved it
Elisha (Rainbow Child)

I would give you some advice when you write do a sort of brain storming and write down everything you can and spread thoughts from each part. Then go to a rhyming site like http://www.rhymezone.com/ and look for rhymes that support your initial aims.

Have fun and keep them flowing