Is This Real?

by xXx Allison xXx   Dec 7, 2006


Life is a funnel,
constantly moving.
Creating two forces,
of the people living.

There are people
going upwards
thriving off change
gaining power
by every minute.

There is people
falling downward
losing life
dying all around
searching for
a new meaning.

This is us,
in the middle
living
learning
growing.

can we help
those around us
become like us
not too powerful
no too weak

is this real?

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  • 17 years ago

    by Bridget

    It has good meaning to it but i think you just need 2 change it a bit so it flows with a bit more ease

  • 17 years ago

    by Colby

    Well, it was good. One thing though, maybe two, first try to make it rythm a little better. Two i guess, try to make it have more detail. Other then that, really good, good meaning behind it, good everything.

  • 17 years ago

    by MischieviousMya

    This is pretty good. a little more could be added or changed. but overall good! =]

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