DOnT lEt heR gO

by FREEtoFLY   Dec 7, 2006


If you find the one don't let her go,
If you love her boy you bettah tell her so!
cuz life moves fast,
get a move on if you're behind...
i know she'll carry me,
i know she'll be a good carrier
as i get older, life gets scarier
my love for her deepens in abyss, sinkin deeper with each kiss, we exist.
in crazy time, surrounded by hating lies, i stray at times,
lose my focus, i use to play with minds, never attached emotion,
but now i pray that my love will be enough for her.
as emotions stir, i've grown immature,
still lack wisdom but my peace in her,
i feast in her passion, her optomism invision focused on a mission
i lock myself in this prisson within,
i rave a big desicion, questions are risen, but there's no doubt in my heart man, she's the one that has been from the start man!
She's the truth, i can feel it in my body, ya know what-
ya probly never know that you shot me!
and i can go on like this forever and ever,
she loves me for me so no matter where i go i know she will ride with me,
she can confide in me,
i let it all out so you know everything about me...
And fantasy becomes reality, i found you or better yet you found me,
picked me up off the ground and put your arms around me,
treated me like a king now lemme crown my queen

[ i know this is from a guys perspective but that's the only way i could make it amazing! but if you have any advice on how to make it better please do share!and please PLEASE comment and vote. thx ]

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  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Ok like seriously every guy needs to read this i mean this should be there bible to live by
    every girl will love this! 5/5 <33

  • 17 years ago

    by TRAGiC BEAUTY

    This is soo good! And thanks for the sweet comment! I know, it's like, people always act like we're so young and we don't know anything but we do. I love how we're both young. Great job!
    xoxo
    Love ya lotsss

  • 17 years ago

    by ABake

    Your writing is very good, but your putting to many feelings into to many words and all in the same poem. Try sorting your work into different poems, and don't let things run together! But otherwise, great work! No offense of what I said, because I've been writing for almost 4 years and once you write for a long time you notice things like this instantly!
    5/5
    xoxo