Love it sweetums! This is soo good and I love the way you set it up! Love it!
xoxo

A neat rhyme scheme, very original. But I think in your last stanza, the words should be more different than what you had like gone and undergone and waits and awaits...you know? But overall nice job with some good imagery!
Charisma*

Hey hun i really appreciate ur comments - u dont know how much. so thanks heaps for them =] this poem was soo good i loved how u structured it. this was my fave line "Hands kept cold without someone else`s to hold" it just sounded so nice n bit sad too. anyway great poem very touching keep em coming =] xx