by Sweet lig Dec 8, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
How does it feel to be broken? |
by Miu
Aww so sad, It's like life can be, and I think this poem really got lot readers thinking about those kind of moments, days and friends. Nicely flowed, touching. |
by Kaila
Okay it was really good but there were a lot of grammatical errors I seen. But you'll improve so no worries =] 4/5 Kaila |
This piece was written very nicely I thought. Held a lot of emotion which almost everyone feels. I thought it was a very good write. 5/5 from me. |
I can deeply relate to this poem. I completely understand the emotions that you portrayed here, whole poem contains sadness which is very heartfelt. |
Again with the cliche. I understand poems are to write your feelings, but never fret; you can do this in a non-cliche way. Try finding different ways to express cliche "crimson tears" and "porcelain face" ect. |