by Jordan Smith Dec 8, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
The lies you hold, the tears I shed, day by day, I wish to hold, one second of a day I don't wish myself dead. |
Interesting format. I thought at first you needed to break it up somewhat but as the poem flows it works really well. The emotive element is a characteristic I like about your work and is strong and consistent in this piece. Keep it up. |
I really have never read any pattern like this and its really nice, good selection of words. |